ToothTen Posted January 3, 2014 Share Posted January 3, 2014 Hello all ! Thanks for checking out my first story, I hope you enjoy it. I've been lurking for more than a year, so hopefully I've got this story thing somewhat figured out, but any tips/requests/conductive criticism is(are) welcomed .I've been toying around with this idea for a bit, and I hope to have a few more installments, so without further ado...Audition (Sorry, I was tired) A/N: Just to clarify, the narrator is a girl, that doesn't become apparent until a little ways inI slid into a red upholstered seat near the front of the theater. This was my second time in the building, but only the first time for an audition, and I was curious to hear how the acoustics were in the small community theater. In my hometown, I knew all the stages like the back of my hand, but here, in my first year of college, quite a ways from home, I was still unaccustomed to these new places.I pulled out the music for my audition, giving it a last minute study as the other cast-hopefuls-- from young kids to those who were middle aged and beyond-- filled in. I recognized a few people from campus, but none of my good friends had the same love for plays and musicals as I did, so I wasn't surprised when I didn't catch sight of any of them.As the seats filled up, I found myself flanked on right and left by an older woman and a guy about my age, respectively. After receiving an unfriendly look from the woman when I made to introduce myself, I turned instead to the young man. I opened my mouth in preparation to speak, but before a word came out, he turned to face me, and the words died on my tongue. His face was unmistakeable, from the clear blue eyes to the chin-length blond hair that feathered softly away from his high cheekbones. I just about drooled.Alex Sander had been a Senior when I was a Sophomore, but I had still had the good fortune to perform with, and even star along side of him in quite a few school and city performances before he graduated. Alex was not only a talented actor and amazing singer, but also quite attractive, with the contrast from his almost delicate facial features and flowing blond hair to his powerful shoulders and overall trim physique. I certainly would be lying if I said I hadn't had a bit of a crush on him through those two years."Melanie! Is that really you?" He spoke first, the suprise evident in his tone. I felt an irrational rush of elation at the simple fact that he remembered me. I felt silly for the thought, but I was glad nonetheless."I can't believe it's you, Alex! I had no idea that you were going to school here." I couldn't fight the ridiculous grin that practically split my face, but at least I managed to get the words out. He smiled back at me, but before he could reply, the director clicked the mic on and a hush fell over us all. The director, a plump, middle aged woman with hair dyed a vivid auburn, had been droning on for all of two minutes before I noticed a constant sniffing from the seat next to mine. I glanced at Alex, and saw that his eyes were closed, and his head was tilted slightly back as he he furiously rubbed at his nose with a knuckle, sniffing periodically while he fought to keep what I guessed was a particularly fierce tickle at bay. After about a minute his ragged breaths became audible as he started to lose ground against the impending sneeze. A moment later his head snapped down to meet his cupped hands, and he let out a painfully wet "hiih'GSHH'oo".Sorry, I have to cut it off there, all the more suspense ! Also I apologize for only one sneeze, but I felt that there was some necessary scene-setting. Link to comment
MoonDuck Posted January 3, 2014 Share Posted January 3, 2014 First story? Awesome job!Sounds great so far, can't wait for more Link to comment
Melody Posted January 3, 2014 Share Posted January 3, 2014 I love ur writing style! Quite impressive! Well I'll be waiting for the next part Link to comment
marina<3 Posted January 3, 2014 Share Posted January 3, 2014 I love your writing style, too! Sounds like it's going to be a great story! I can't wait for more! Link to comment
Little_sniffle Posted January 16, 2014 Share Posted January 16, 2014 wow I really love this story so far!! Link to comment
v a n i l l a Posted January 28, 2014 Share Posted January 28, 2014 So far, I love this (: Link to comment
Hibiscus Posted January 28, 2014 Share Posted January 28, 2014 Please continue this but I have a request; Can you italicize the sneezes? Link to comment
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